Dear receiver
Me name is Billy, Billy Gunn, I am
stuck on an island called Treasure Island .
Used to be a pirate. Yep I was first mate on Cap’n Flint’s ship. (You may of
‘eard of ‘im!) Anyway as you near the island the sea will become a desert. Not
a bird
will call, not a fish will jump. The reason for this will be clear when you see
the starved sailors hanging in nets dangling from a cliff. (Caused by Cap’n Flint
Living on this island is torture
especially if you’ve been ‘ere 2 WHOLE YEARS! All I can eat is
coconuts and all I can drink is coconut
milk. That darned Flint
How I wish I could be back home. I
should have never become a pirate, I miss lamb and pork chops, plus all my
friends. Also I miss playing tag even though I am old an’ I want to change me
clothes!
If ya save me ya reward ‘ll be
grand! I promise! OH FOR PETES SAKE SAVE ME!!!
From White beard Gunn.
Excellent use of 'pirate-talk' makes this sound like an authentic letter. I also like the way you adapted the language of the book you were reading and used it here to describe the island. Maybe you could have included a little hint about the potential reward on offer? Something to really make any passing sailor sit up and think.
ReplyDeleteI liked the the expression (which was MY idea!) I really like the way people in my class have used my idea and make their letters sound more realistic. :)
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